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Thank you all for the comments and encouragement. This was suppose to show self doubt at work, changing the bold quoted comment in the beginning into the timid quoted comment at the end, as each line is reworked and edited in the light of self doubt. I’d hoped the indentation and unfinished sentences would make this editing process more clear, but it doesn’t seem to have helped. Maybe strike-through text would have worked better. I’ll keep at it. Thank you again. - Drew
This is so powerful. It's suspenseful, and even though at first it may seem confusing the transitioning is actually extremely well put together. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Well done Drew! You've written with suspence in every word. I love the way I think I know what's about to happen, but at the same time I don't know at all :)
Hope to read some more from you!
I'm normally not much of a poetry kind of guy, but I have to say that I found the emotional ricochetting of this one captivating. Very interesting, and well written!
wow, the way you make the transition from stanze to stanze is amazing, your lines are left in unfinished yet they connect with the next so well! Unbrace has such an individual style as well, so creative, loved the read !
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